Profile of Lee Underwood, son of Trivia

Um, hi! You've gone to a good start, but you should go look at the profile of the characters.

It's not enough information, Roman brother dear.

Hey! It's not fair! You have more powers than I do!

Control over the Mist?!

Oh, and what do you mean by Flaws: Bugs.? I'm confused.

~Christina Hughes, daughter of Hecate

Ok, thank you! ! ! I'll edit it right now...

Child of Trivia (how should I call you actually?)
What Christina said is exactly what I mean
Just to make sure that you know how to create a character a character properly, you should have a look of the guidelines and other posts here: https://campsfordemigods.rpg-board.net/f28-things-you-need-to-know
In fact, you can follow the format here : https://campsfordemigods.rpg-board.net/t4-profile-of-your-character
Also you can take reference from the characters approved here: https://campsfordemigods.rpg-board.net/f11-approved-characters

Feel free to ask me if need help

~Katerina, daughter of Athena

This is much better
But before approving it, I hope that you could make some changes so that Lee will become a more developed character

Firstly, about the physical description, simply by writing "handsome" is not enough for describing Lee. You could choose to include a picture of him or make the description more detailed

Secondly, it would be better if you add more bad points (about 3 more) and good points (1-2) to its personality part, as Lee sounds a bit like a Gary-sue. Also, about the "Favorite place at camp" part, I'm sorry to tell you that it can't be "Trivia's cabin", because there aren't any cabin for a particular god/goddess' children in Camp Jupiter, but cohorts instead. So, you may have to change that...

Thirdly, in the relationship part, you've written that Alexandra who's not a demigod is Lee's girlfriend. So how does he keep contact with her when he's in Camp Jupiter? Are they still close?

About the "power" part in "Battle", I think it would be better if you add limits to Lee's powers. Otherwise, this will be like god-playing which's not allowed here. Also, most campers here are allowed to have at most 3 powers, so you may need to edit that part...(by the way, what's "necromacy"? I've never heard of this before Also, what kinds of incarnations can Lee do?)
Moreover, where's the "strengths" and "weaknesses" parts? You as well have to fill those parts in. Um...I don't think "Bugs" can be a fatal flaw... Flaw flaw should be something like having low self-esteem, being stupid, pride, etc.

Lastly, about the biography part, um...it's a good try, but there're still some problems that need to be solved. Generally, mortals won't be granted any powers like magic. So, you should make some changes on that Also, most campers in Camp Jupiter have to survived from the training of Lupa before entering the camp. Lee couldn't just appear in the camp from nowhere...

I think this profile, considering it's your first, it's already quite good. Once you've corrected it, we'll approve it
If you don't know how to do, you can take references from other APPROVED characters.
You can also ask me if you need any help
Looking forward to approve yours!!!
By the way, next time when you want to edit your post, just click the black button "Edit" on the top instead of posting a new one

~Katerina, daughter of Athena

Ok, i'll edit it know, I will edit the second character trivia I putted
... By the way, necromancy is the mental or physical ability to control the bodies and spirits of the dead...

Can I put that Alexandra is a legacy of Venus?? And i'll put it in my character sheet...

You mean like a daughter of Venus?
Yes, for sure

Not actually like a child of Venus, fir example, Octavian and Frank. Octavian, legacy of Apollo and Frank Legacy of Poseidon....

Alexandra's mither was a daughter of Venus. So Alexandra is a legacy of Venus...

it's also ok

Actually, in the "Personality and characteristics" part is refering to the good(e.g.nice to the others) and bad points(e.g.superficial) of Lee's personality, instead of what he's good/weak at battles.

Also, what kinds of incarnations do Lee do? Does he always suceed? What's his strength in battles?

Add these and I'll approve it

Done, I think I took some action out of the personality and charasteristic:DDD

Alright, approved

Thanks you so much!!!